Wednesday, 18 June 2014

My Explaination

WALT- I can write sentences that have a variety of starters and lengths.

Here is a paragraph out of my writing that shows I have done this.

In the baby carrier example, a company was making fake baby carriers and selling them as a different company. This case has broken many rights. This case is putting many lives in danger because of the unsafe product. This means that as a result of this, it is effecting not only the consumers but the REAL business. For a start, the effect on the consumer is that they are putting their young lives in danger. 

I have used connectives, clauses and other things.

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