School Camps Aren't a Waste of Time

This is a paragraph from my persuasive arguement.I am learning to add persuasive phrases/words to make my writing more persuasive.

Here are some reasons why school camps are not a waste of time.Firstly you can meet new people and make new friends.Students get to know their teacher better and learn interesting things about them.Students may even learn about their good friends!Obviously you are pushed to aim higher and take risks which helps you become more confident in yourself.Clearly,school camps give you many experiences for example competitions,night games like spotlight,risky activities and your teachers holding strict room inspections.Do you want to be part of a group of people who don't want fun for their children?So let all children go on school camps!

This writing shows that I can use persuasive phrases/words.
For example clearly,obviously and do you want to be part of......